Come near
Lend me your ear
Allow me to tell
You an unbelievable tale
About a curse on the town
In the form of a fiery red crown
By the name of Becca Sue
With her orbs of cerulean blue
She brings a hex
On all who suspects
The truth she has hidden
Even from the soul she’s ridden
Carefully whispering seductions
With careful mental conductions
Her porcelain-hued skin
Concealing the sin within
An instrument of evil
Causing so much upheaval
Too small to raise Cain
A symbiotic relationship with Jane
Roaming through the streets
They unsettle all she meets
Leaving behind curses and bad luck
Against all who offend or acts a schmuck
The hellion she rides
Is happy to let the demon decide
Just who goes unhurt
And who’s left lying in the dirt
While the parasitic fiend is only too glad
To allow her mortal host to run rabidly mad
Like a wild animal
Acting like a cannibal
Two heathens in one
A town with nowhere to run
Supernatural tormentors
Devilish disenters
The hellish fiend possessing a child’s doll
The child who heeds the malevolent call
Where one is, the other will be also
When one leaves, the other will go
One carried tenderly, of course
While the other is a packhorse
They enjoy causing trouble
This dastardly couple
Full of mayhem
The only way to stop them
Was to destroy their bond
That was diabolically spawned
The day the doll was sewn
With hair freshly hewn
From Jane’s locks
And making Becca Sue’s frocks
Before painting her lips with witch’s blood
Creating the monstrous flood
From the malicious incarnate
Evil deeds of the fiendish discarnate
Planning to tear down the town’s walls
By using a little girl to take the fall
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Good Morning, Mother! I've been meaning to say for a while now, thank you for all the likes. You are invariably the first to look over a new piece of mine, and this is greatly appreciated! I've been away from Vocal for a bit, to sort out a new job, but it was past time I revisited yours to have a look at your works. First off, I really love this well-deserved Top Story! There's so much going on in it to invoke scary folktales of yore (and I know such stories of long ago are one of your specialities!), but equally as much which put me in mind of more recent sinister fantasies from the world of film and television. I don't know much about Game of Thrones, but Becca Sue called to mind the villainess in The Little Norse Prince, for example, whilst the creepy doll was like Coraline! In other words, what's been said by literature students (over and over again) about misogyny in fairy tales overlooks the fact that we still love a scary little girl story, even to this day! Then there are the likes of Wednesday Addams, who we actually do love in a different sense, and as with all generalisations it turns out to be much more complex than the students will tell you. I'm grateful for poems like yours, which expand on and explore such matters! Meanwhile the idea of two girls in symbiosis, which lies at the core of the poem, are intriguing. This steered me in the direction of Goblin Market by Christina Rossetti, for example. Besides the storybook witchcraft and wickedness there are clearly other things going on beneath the surface here, and your poem hints at them in the most compelling style. Really enjoyed it, in other words! I shall take a look at some of your other pieces too. Thanks again for being such a faithful fan of mine!
Congrats top story🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺 Love it 🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺🌺
Read again. Very nicely composed. Though I must say, I find poems harder to grasp fully.
Woaw perfectly describing a narcissist thru It and now in the month of ghost it feels very real like one of the zombies out there Congratulations on Top Story !!! ❤️🌞🔥
Made a new one 💞💞💖💖hope you like it ❤️❤️
Absolutely love your poem so imaginative and fantasy love these kind of poems..I love your whole profile so whimsical 💞💞💞plz lmk what you think of my piece and I subscribed btw!
A haunting story where innocence and evil are forever entwined in a sinister dance of destruction.
A fantastic and superbly written poem. It is a well-deserved Top Story.
That's horrifying! I love it 😁 Where did you get the idea?
A little too gory for me, but well deserved Top Story. Nicely Done !! People just call you Mother, but I am 75, and what is your first name?
Wow what great work! A tale and a rhyme well done you
so nice
Nice❤️❤️❤️
Congrats on Top Story! 🎉 Well deserved. Keep up the good work!
Congratulations! Well done.
Ooooo! Look who got most popular story this week!! Congrats MC!!!
Planning to tear down the town’s walls By using a little girl to take the fall
The MINUTE I saw the photo, I got chills. Well done. Congrats on the TS and Leaderboard!! 🎉🥳
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Great work, Mother! Congrats to the leaderboard too!
out of line to say this is simply delicious?....perfect lines, devious tone and delivered with a smile (i'm assuming) Congrats on top story
You did your thing Mother! 💪🏾WOW! 😱
Oh I love this, Sharon! This is what you do so well - these haunting, darkly comic almost, pieces. I love the way you brought out their symbiotic bond...I mean trouble is afoot when you use your own hair to sew on hair for your doll lol. Congrats on a sublimely creepy little Top Story! Well Deserved!
Back to say Congratulations on Top Story!!
Your poem is hauntingly weaving a chilling tale. Brilliantly unsettling.